Monday, June 1, 2009

Oregon Trail ~by Roberto

One day my friend Ezra Meeker was on his farm in Washington, D.C. He was sitting with his ill wife, Eliza Jane; his seven year old son; and me, his good friend Samuel. I looked at his son and wife and then I noticed that they were crying. They had the saddest faces in the whole world because Ezra wanted to leave their family, friends, and home in Washington DC. They were trying to be strong and brave because Ezra believed that moving West would make their lives better. Ezra knew his wife was in danger of dying at any time. He needed money to help her heal, and he beleived going west was the only way to get it.
"It has taken 30 years to create our live here. Our crops are growing, we have friends and family here. Why do you want to leave?" Eliza Jane asked.
"California is the land of riches. The land of milk and honey!" Ezra cried. His only thought was to save his ill wife and give his son a better life. He was thinking about going West to find gold and riches.

Finally, his family agreed and they left for California. They dreamed of gold and a cure for Eliza. But they also all wanted to stop in Nebraska to stay with family for a time. They missed their family in Nebraska. His family really wanted to make Ezra stay with them in Nebraska. His father said, "Now Ezra, you know the grass isn't always greener on the other side! You have family here and we know the land. Stay with us."
But he already had bad news for them. "We are going to California. I know that California will save my wives life. If some of you want to come with me, please tell me now. We will return to Nebraska one day, after Eliza is cured and we are rich!"

After a year on the Oregon trail, the Meekers finally made it to California. Ezra sent his father a letter telling him of their arrival. While he was excited, he did admit that they were really struggled to make a living. "We left for Nebraska to search for a better living, but things were even worse there. We are coming home." In Nebraska, Eliza, Ezra and his son and Samuel all moved in with Ezra's parents. Once there, Ezra went from being a farmer to a protector of his family. Although Eliza was not cured in California, she did get stronger and stronger in Nebraska. Later Ezra told me, "My beautiful wife was cured, not by riches and gold or the sunshine of California. She was cured by the love of her family."

Ezra learned that the grass is not always greener in California! He learned that nothing - not gold or sunshine - can replace the love of family. And he learned that sometimes you have to learn these lessons for yourself along the Oregon trail.

~by Roberto

28 comments:

  1. It is very intresting the lesson they learn. I have one question who is the main charecter. Very strong feeling.
    Fuller

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  2. Your story was very organized and it was filled with a lot of emotion.


    Brady Anderson

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  3. Wow! I really liked your writing. The theme was something that everyone can relate to and learn from this. Your story was also well organized. You did a really good job on your efflection. You did a great job!
    Melissa

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  4. ~ Cassandra Campbell
    I liked how you said in you story that she was not cured by riches but cured by the love of her family.

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  5. I love the theme of the story. Your story was very organized and the ending was great.

    Ruben A. Parra

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  6. You had a great story theme with a lot of emotion entwined in. You also had a great amount of inflection, and you went slow.
    Schuyler

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  7. Your story theme was amazing because you know money can never buy you love, and the grass isn't always greener on the other side. You had really amazing quotes.


    Tomi

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  8. *Your story was well thought out and organized.
    *You went slow for me to keep up.
    *Your story was very interesting.
    Kameron

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  9. Your story was amasing because you ephisised the meaning and forshadowd
    You really gave us thought on how to not give up for riches

    Great theme and one cofusion on who was the main charecter

    Fuller

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  10. I really like the message of love it is very strong.
    I like the conflict and feelings in the characters.
    I also enjoy your use of sayings
    adam

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  11. 1.( I liked the way that you described that the grass isn't always greener on the other side.
    2.( I think that you could add more eye contact.

    Anders

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  12. I really like the life-lesson learned in your story. Although the grass in California IS pretty green...

    Your writing was organized and life like.

    Clay Humphrey

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  13. I liked the theme of your story. I also liked your inflection as you read your story.

    Julio Vazquez

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  14. I really like your stories it was really good. I like the love that you had in the story and the end was really good too.

    By~ Yesenia Rodriguez

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  15. The theme was great! I liked your ending. Excellent inflection!
    Scott Mclennan

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  16. Roberto, I loved your story, the theme was so nice family is better than gold, really made me smile. Great job and keep writing! - Your friend Paul.

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  17. great ending how you told us that it was the love of the family not riches to cure the wife

    Very good discription too it helped us understand the story

    Cameron Campbell

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  18. I really liked how the love of your family cured Eliza. I like how you said that love is more important than gold or sunshine.

    ~ Claire Andrews

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  19. I liked how you were shaking a little, but you kept going
    Il also liked how you said at the and your topic so we could remember what you were reading about. FROM:Cinthya

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  20. I like you ending and emotion and talented I loved it!!!
    Stefani Cervantes

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  21. Sandra Tzompa-SosaJune 1, 2009 at 12:02 PM

    What I liked about you story the most was your ending. Great Job!

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  22. you were nice and clear and I liked your story because you put names and families it was really interesting

    *yesica*

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  23. I really loved your ending! It is so good because you wrote what the girl learned after all of your story.

    ~ Danicia Quezada.

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  24. I liked how you said that gold and riches could never cure anything. you had amazing phrases.



    Tomi

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  25. I love he theme and how you said it it was sad!

    By Juan Morillon

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  26. You did a great job with going to the good parts.
    ~Amelia

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  27. your story was peaty good

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  28. Roberto - I loved your story. You did a nice job researching and finding good fact. They are woven into a great story.

    I also love the fact you practiced reading it so many times. Like many times, you showed your dedication to your education. You are a great student and have a great story to prove it!

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