Coming to America.
The day that my family decided to move to Jackson, I was really happy. I had never been to Jackson, Wy. My mom promised, "Jackson is really cool. You will like Jackson a lot." I do. I have friends here, and I have good teachers and good classes. We flew in a plane to the border and then the adventure would begin.
In order to cross the border, we had to cross the desert. It was scary. In the desert, it is very hot. One Coyote ran my family and me over the border. He was not an animal. El Coyote was a man who helped pass my family and me into the United States. The desert is really hot and has dangerous animals like snakes. If you have food and water, you will be OK, but if you run out you are in trouble. During the day, the desert sometimes is so hot, but at night it is so cold. The desert is really dangerous.
We were lucky, we made it through. I kept thinking about snow. I kept saying to myself, "Be a good BIG sister. Be strong. Stay with my family!" It helped me keep going.
When we arrived in Jackson, I was so happy. I was happy because I was with my new family, here in Jackson WY. I was worried because many Mexicans are in the jail. But my family is not. I'm lucky; I like my new family very much. My mom said, "I told you that Jackson is really cool."
I said, "It is. I like school."
She said, "Good!" She is happy because I am learning English fast. It is so important to go to school. She wants my brothers and me to have good opportunities in life. We all know that school will help us get those opportunities.
There is a lot to learn here in Jackson, but it's my home. Home is where FAMILY is! I so happy because I have my family and I have my family and my beautiful home!
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I liked your descriptions and specifics and authors methods. Also introduction also it made me made me have lots of connections! I also think that you sliced. Your story was wonderful and I loved it!!!
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your story was pretty good.~Danny
ReplyDeleteI liked your description like the dangeros animals.
ReplyDeletejose
There is a lot to learn here in Jackson, but it's my home. Home is where FAMILY is! I so happy because I have my family and I have my family and my beautiful home! I love this last part it has really good emotions.
ReplyDeleteTomi
*great story
ReplyDelete*I liked your plot
*Great Inflection
Kameron
I really like your story. You did a good job reading it. Good Story!
ReplyDeleteI liked your story. You did great describing. You did a great job.
ReplyDeleteColumbia
I liked how you described the dessert like how it was cold at night and hot in the day
ReplyDelete~ Cassandra C.
I love how she did a great job telling it and expressing there fellings. your friend Roberto Ponce
ReplyDeleteYour story is awesome. I love it it made me think lik if I was back there when I came here too. I really love your story.
ReplyDeleteYou sliced the slick very well.
ReplyDeleteI liked the that the story was about you not a made up chaceter.
Anders
I liked how you cared so much about your family and it is cool that your story was about just you and your family
ReplyDeleteCameron
I like how you said that home is were the family is.
ReplyDelete~Amelia
I realy liked thr way how aall the things that could go wrong but the goall overcame it.
ReplyDeleteI liked that you spoke to yourself.
I really liked how you wrote when you would pause.
i like how you paused and emphizezed ruben parra
ReplyDeleteIsa, I loved how you described the desert and your adventure. And your story had a great theme - no matter where you are you are O.K with family! - Paul
ReplyDeleteI liked how you read it. It was good how your story was about you. You did a really good job.
ReplyDeleteScott
You were very great at writing and you explained how hot the desert was and how dangerious and You discribed how you were so very happy to be living in Jackson!
ReplyDelete~Taylor!
Great story. You had a good sense about moving and being happy. Great thoughts and feelings. You paused at the exact right moments. Good job
ReplyDeleteSchuyler
I like how you wrote your thoughts and feelings. I like how you read slow.
ReplyDeleteJulio Vazquez
I love the fact that you were willing to share about your life and not a character. Your story was done very well.
ReplyDeleteI liked how you read and when you put some action in you story I LIKE IT!
ReplyDelete~Yesica~
You had a great story Isa! You had great feelings about how you were feeling about coming to Jackson. Great job at pausing at good points so the reader could catch up and that you made it very emphisised. I liked how you made this story about you and not about a made up character. Amazing job!
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ReplyDeleteYou had an amazing story. It was cool how your story was about you not some made up character. Good Job.
ReplyDelete~Claire Andrews
The one above is Melissa that ends with Amazing job
ReplyDeleteIsa me gusto mucho tu historia me gusto que hablaste de tu vida.
ReplyDeleteI really like your story the thing that you did a pretty good job was when you described how the desert is and looked when you were there. Good job.
ReplyDelete~Danicia.
I'm so proud of you! Great presentation!! You spoke loudly, clearly and with inflection. You shared a story that most of us can't even imagine - thank you for spreading this kind of knowledge. When we know more about each other, we can be more compassionate and kind!
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