Sunday, May 31, 2009

Nascar ~ by Matt

War. I can hear gun shots all around me. I can see men falling at my side. I can feel the cold of the gun, and all around me is war. It doesn't bother me, though, as I am fighting for freedom. I continue fighting despite the nagging thought that I might not return home.

I did make it home, and it had been three years since the war ended and still I had no job. My family was patient at first, but then they started getting eager for me to get a job. All I wanted to do, though, was race. Last year, Nascar was founded by Bill France, my dad's friend. He was a gas station owner and amateur racer. February 15, 1948 just South of Dayton Beach was debut race. I went. It was amazing. 14,000 fans came to watch. The cars sped around the track at fast speeds, generating winds that gusted all the way to the top of the grand stand where I was sitting. The cars raced with so much force. It was the first time I had felt this kind of excitement since returning home. I knew I had to get the job, race, and win.


The morning after the race I knew that something was wrong with dad. I felt his forehead. It was hotter than the hottest sun that ever beat down on my back. I wanted to feel the same happiness I felt when I watched the racing, but there was nothing. That feeling was gone. All I could think of now is how dad was doing. The next moment when I looked up, the doctor was coming toward me. I can sense there was sadness and fear in his eyes. I thought, Is there something wrong? He showed me into the room were dad was. As I walked in, I could feel the sadness. I could see dad on the hospital bed, lying in pain. I glanced at the heart monitor; it was almost a straight line. The doctor said he might not make it through the night. At that moment, for the first time, I felt scared for Dad's survival. If we only had more money, he could get the medicine that could save his life.

The next morning I decided right then and there what I was going to do to help my dad. So I ran out to the racetrack as fast as I could and asked Bill France if I could race on the Nascar Winston cup circuit to help dad. At first he shrugged. When I mentioned dad, he gave me the job faster than any jackrabbit I ever saw. He said, "Tomorrow you start practicing," and showed me all around the track.

I could practiced using his secondary car. It felt like I belonged there, and with Bill as my teacher, it was great. The car was built for speed in every way, and it was so nice I almost won my first race in it. But it was a little too beefed up and on one of the turns I kept my foot on the gas a little too long. I flew up the racetrack and hit the wall on the final turn, letting the Red Byron pass me and I lost the race. I broke my right leg in the crash, so I couldn't race with just my left leg. I thought, My family is right; I shouldn't have raced. But I had so much of a lead from the third place guy, and so much momentum to get second place. I didn't win, and I didn't get enough money to save Dad. I needed to continue.

The next weekend I went to the hospital and dad is still alive, and when racing came up in my mind again, I didn't know what to do. I had two thoughts in my mind: stay and help versus go and race. I knew that if I asked my father, he would say go and race, so I did. I went down to the track. I knew I had to do something so I asked everyone if they had secondary car. Everyone said no excepted one. Buck Backer was really sick and couldn't race but he had a car to race. I asked him if I could borrow his car for the race. He gave me the keys; I was so astonished that someone would let me use their car. That car was even better than Bill France's car. This race I knew my mistake and this time I kept the car off of the wall at the last turn and won the race. I thought, Wow I did it! My family was wrong - I can race, and I will be good at it! I threw my hands in the air and listened as the crowd cheered.

I raced into Victory Lane and grabbed my big check. I took a few pictures for the newspaper and a magazine. I then raced away from the press and back to the hospital. As I ran in, I was saying to my self, “Please still be here, please still be here, please please still be here.” And on the bed there was dad still hanging on. I let out a big sigh of relief. Everyone was so excited I was back to help. I pulled out the huge check and everybody almost fainted they were so excited to see a gigantic check for $10,000 dollars. I had saved Dad the check payed for the surgery and still had enough money left over to buy my own car to race in.

My Dad is as great as ever, even though he is still sore from the surgery. He is teaching me how to race well. I haven’t been a part of the racing action since dad’s surgery. We headed down to the racetrack and the racers were packing up for another race, and were on the road following the group of race haulers traveling all over the country from Daytona Beach, Florida to Fontana, California 38 weeks a year were on the move racing.

By ~ Matt

22 comments:

  1. * I loved how you took an ordinary topic and made it powerful. The ending was great!

    * You had good description, especially in the hospital scene(s).

    * You were slow, loud, and clear- even without the speaker!
    ~ :) Nicole

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  2. *It was cool how you made all of the facts in your story and how you made them flowing instead of hard and boring.

    *It was cool how you made him race for his dad and then finally get the money to save him!

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    SLICE: You were loud and clear.

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  3. 1. Your story has great thoughts and feelings.
    2. You had great vocabulary.
    3. You were loud and clear. You kept eye contact with everybody.

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  4. *Good C.T.F

    *good description

    *Changed your voice to mach the mood

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  5. * You had good characters thoughts and feelings.
    * You had good description about your dad's face and how hot it was.
    Slick:
    Slice: You read it loud and clear. It made it easy to hear you.

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  6. 1. Great similes

    2. Really good action

    3. Was fluent wile speaking to us.

    Tenzing

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  7. I like how you started out with war. And then you went into racing. Your story was great.

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  8. good C.T.F. good voice . good description. alex

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  9. 1. You had good thoughts and feelings.
    2. You had good action.
    3. You were loud so that we could hear, you had good voice.

    -River

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  10. good description
    good voice
    good inflection
    felt like i was there watching the race

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  11. I thought you had good action like when you broke you leg.

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  12. 1. Good action I felt Like I was at the race.


    2. Good diolouge.

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  13. *Your story had a lot of good action words.
    *I liked the character's thoughts and feelings in your story.
    *You spoke very clearly when you read your story.

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  14. 1. Good description.

    2. Good ctfs.

    3. You were loud.

    -Dylan

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  15. *you had good CTF
    *you had good action
    *You weren't monotone



    Ben

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  16. *you had good ctf and dicription

    *there was a lot of action with the breaking of the leg and dad is sick

    *I liked how you said that the family said you couldn't race and you did.

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  17. *GOOD JOB-matt
    *don't forget- SLICK & SLICE
    *your story was really good
    *great presentation matt!
    -kenzy

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  18. I like the action at the beginning of the story

    I like the specifics of your story.

    you had all the slick and slice, very well read.

    Sean B

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  19. *You had really good characters thoughts and feelings.

    *You read with a clear voice without stumbling over to many words.

    *Good job using original descripition.

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  20. Matt,
    * Great story! You were very descriptive and spacific by the way you were talking about houw fast the cars were going and how when they past the croud you could feel the rush of them...
    * You had great action in your story!

    SLICK:
    SLICE: You were slow, loud, you had inflection, you were clear and you had eye contact! Plus your story was kicky!
    Great Job Matt!

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  21. 1. Nice action in your story.
    2. Good thoughts and feeling too.
    3. You were slow and clear and loud
    Zeke N

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  22. This is a great example of passion and hobby meeting a writing topic. You did a good job of finding research (and connecting it to WWII) and making this work. I love that he helped his father while pursuing his dream! Good job, Matt. If you start reading and writing more, your own writing is going to improve leaps and bounds. You already have the creativity...

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